for a moment of joy or moments no one pays for, i give myself a ‘jornal’. this makes me rich. try it.

haibun: my first shooting star (para mi hermana, Margaret)

A haibun attempt as promised for Margaret, mi hermana de mi alma, in a comment on Stargazing at haikudoodle

I wrote this as a journal some ten years ago when I stayed at Angeles Estates in Munoz, Nueva Ecija, the Philippines’ central plains. Nothing but acres of rice fields, edged by the Sierra Madres the sky most evenings did tantalize. One evening I finally caught a shooting star…

It flared in the shape of wings, and was gone in a blink – my first shooting star.

Before then, a moon was sailing past its fullness, but brimming in the edges. It was cruising toward a thin veil of clouds, sailing through an iridescent sky. Its ride must have been bumpy on the grainy surface, but dreamy from a tender blue light beaming underneath that sieve.

In the glow, the lawn turned murky beige, the leaves of the escarlatina (frangipani), dark and glinting; and the gumamela blooms, pallid and droopy.

My eyes were trailing a white dog, yellowed under a weak moon, when the star must have started to skid. When I turned to break a branch to whip the ground and drive the dog away—that was when I glimpsed the flare.

It had vanished before I could breathe. I laughed; my laughter had bubbled off my heart without my coaxing. When I turned for someone whom I can tell of my star, the night had turned: the moon had burst out of the clouds, the blooms began to glisten; and the dog was gone.

shooting star—
a flap of wings
the same sky?

AE gardens during the day

Escarlatina in the sun

Also posted in with a few paragraphs which I attempted to translate in Iluko. More pictures and information on the estate at


December 17, 2010 - Posted by | haibun, lyrical prose, poetry | , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , ,


  1. Alegria, here’s the poem I left you at my site:

    winged star
    the bright light of a poet
    born to shine

    para Alegria

    Comment by Margaret Dornaus | December 17, 2010 | Reply

    • How does one feel stepping into a meteor glow of words? That’s how I feel, mi hermana! Mil de mil gracias! I’m totally, totally overwhelmed with your “reading” of me and my future. I’ll strive to live up to it is all I can repay you with…

      Comment by alee9 | December 18, 2010 | Reply

  2. These are so much fun to write! Just as fun as reading this adventurous but theme-tight work. 🙂

    Comment by Steve Isaak | December 17, 2010 | Reply

    • Thanks for coming by, Steve! I’m glad you liked the adventure and had fun as well.

      Comment by alee9 | December 18, 2010 | Reply

  3. I haven’t found a writer as great as you are. Two thumbs up for a awesome job!

    Comment by Era Gelber | December 23, 2010 | Reply

    • Thanks! I hope to live up to this.

      Comment by alee9 | December 23, 2010 | Reply

  4. Strong haiku! Love the form.

    Comment by Miriam Sagan | January 15, 2011 | Reply

    • Thanks for this comment, Miriam!

      Comment by alee9 | January 15, 2011 | Reply

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