jornales

for a moment of joy or moments no one pays for, i give myself a ‘jornal’. this makes me rich. try it.

Need to know why editor passed on these haiku

These haiku belong to a batch of 20 I recently submitted with temerity to what I call a ‘cutting-edge’ haiku journal. None was accepted, of course, although two interested the editor. Why? I can’t figure out on my own. Could you help me think this through? I reworked on three of them (1, 2 & 5) and did not include what got the editor’s eye.

1.
seagulls scanning tide marks
as if tasked

2.
competing with shadows
the winter wind

3.
salmon–
on winter clouds
a hue

4.
stepping into a fog
knowing
white also fades

5.
origami–
in her hands a crane
a smile

Origami crane folded from one uncut square of paper by Andreas Bauer courtesy of wikicommons

January 8, 2011 Posted by | haiku, poetry | , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , | 8 Comments

in the stable/the magi

The three Magi before Herod, France, early 15th century. Stained glass: colored glass, grisaille; lead. Restored by F. Pivet, 1999. Artist unknown. Courtesy of Wikimedia Commons.

in the stable
the donkey brays
at knowing magi

a magus’ myrrh
its almost fragrance
only for the babe

conversations–
the magi, the Star
a sleeping babe

the magi
scattered on sand–
mere shadows

among sand dunes
the magi
still counting stars

December 29, 2010 Posted by | haiku, poetry, Uncategorized | , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , | 2 Comments

canyon evening sequence (one shoot Sunday)

*inspired by a photograph of Trent Chau

rattling the air
the cawing of crows—
our flight hours more

sunset
breaches rain-swept horizon
where embers sizzle

clouds wash
the canyon fissures,
draining our fears

from dreams
shadows rise fracturing
evening fall

canyon evening—
wind tracks to follow
the shimmering light

I posted this poem for One Shoot Sunday at the One Stop Poetry blog.

Join us – throw in your verses. Here are the rules (taken directly off their blog):

1. Write a poetic piece & post it on your blog
2. Then let us know about your post. Link back to One Shot
3. Sign up in the Mr Linky list, linking directly to your post, AFTER you’ve posted it.
4. Go visit others who have signed up! Offer support & encouragement. Share your love of words and insight respectfully. Please try to visit as many participating poets as you can. We all could use and appreciate kind feedback.

November 21, 2010 Posted by | poetry, sequence | , , , , , , , , , , , | 14 Comments