jornales

for a moment of joy or moments no one pays for, i give myself a ‘jornal’. this makes me rich. try it.

my ‘precious stones’ haiku thread on Sketchbook February 2012

It’s been quite a whirl for me as I tried to keep up with submissions and still failed to meet some including that of Sketchbook for February. These pieces for the haiku thread, in fact, got to the editor’s inbox a day after the deadline. I marked it as another flop but John Daleiden had kindly put it in…Working on the next deadline for April 19 now: ‘pond life’ for the haiku thread and ‘swing’ for the kukai. Check out Sketchbook from my blogroll. 

1.

midnight sky

the glint of sapphire

on wet leaves

2.

first meeting

her opal smoothness

in a handshake

3.

diamond stud

rooting on her chin

unsaid words

4.

her eyes

on the emerald display case

mid-sea calm

5.

bishop’s ring

i kiss a ruby stain

on the martyr’s relic

6.

waning moon

the scent of topaz

fainter

7.

an onyx heart

in grandma’s jewelry box

hidden crescent

8.

the sultan taps

the serpent’s sapphire eyes

ceremonial belt

9.

champagne cabochon

her tears as he slips his mom’s

wedding ring in hers

10.

candle fingers

the snake’s garnet scales

wraps her pinky

March 27, 2012 Posted by | haiku, poetry | , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , | Leave a comment

More on my haiku from “hearts” Sketchbook Haiku Thread

Or when my haiku works as in these…

Editor’s Choice “hearts” Haiku Thread ~ Karina Klesko, US

monitor—
his heart’s dips and coasts
but where is love?

# 73. Alegria Imperial, CA

Comment:

“This is one that steals away the explanations of technology. There is no machine thus far that can record the heart, soul of a human.”

Guest Editor’s Choice “hearts” Haiku Thread ~ Bernard Gieske, US (Dimension of Images, Senses, Feelings)

“Thirty-five Poets from these twelve countries wrote one-hundred-sixty-six poems for the “Hearts” Haiku Thread: Australia, Bangladesh, Bulgaria, Canada, Croatia, Finland, India, Philippines, Poland, Romania, Trinidad and Tobago, United States.

I appreciate this opportunity to make these haiku/senryu picks. I often read and see works on this site about which I would like to respond. In making my picks I looked for those haiku that created for me a second or third dimension of images, senses, feelings; due to the choice and arrangement of words: haiku/senryu that do more than just sit there.”

Read this (next one) by Alegria and see if you agree.

strawberries
cut in half—
such hollow hearts

# 65. Alegria Imperial, CA

Comment:

“A delightful picture of strawberries and perhaps a surrounding pleasing aroma. A straight forward picture of halved strawberries. The key word is hollow and destroys the whole picture. This is unexpected and changes the reader’s feelings completely but exemplifies a fact of reality. Sometimes friends don’t prove to be true.”

Editor’s Choice “hearts” Haiku Thread ~ John Daleiden, US (With an introductory poem, “How do I love thee? Let me count the ways”, Sonnets from The Portuguese by Elizabeth Barrett Browning)

Maternal Love

heartbeat—
her hand on her belly
searching for it

# 71. Alegria Imperial, CA

Comment:

“I have selected these haiku as choice because they represent the heart(s) theme in explicit and unique ways. They also are exemplary haiku, well constructed and meet many of the following attributes of haiku:

• constructed in a fragment and phrase manner; a haiku written in two syntactical parts seperated by a grammatical or punctuation break. See Jane Reichold’s article: Fragment and Phrase Theory;
• uses kireji: written with punctuation or an obvious grammatical break in the syntax of the lines.
• contains 5 7 5 or fewer syllables
• uses the second line a a pivot structure, effectively creating a haiku without resorting to writing an English sentence spread over three lines. Example above: # 123. Bouwe Brouwer, NL
• makes / uses a literary illusion: # 29. Cristina-Monica Moldoveanu, RO
• uses a kigo”

Read the one-hundred sixty-six poems written for the Heart(s) Haiku Thread in Sketchbook Jan-Feb 2011 Issue Vol. 6. (click on it on my blogroll)

April 7, 2011 Posted by | comment, haiku, poetry | , , , , , , , , , | 2 Comments