jornales

for a moment of joy or moments no one pays for, i give myself a ‘jornal’. this makes me rich. try it.

rain

rain

grayer

than

feathers

November

 

 

(also posted at NaHaiWriMo)

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December 1, 2011 - Posted by | haiku, poetry, reflection | , , , , , , ,

6 Comments »

  1. Oh! I like this VERY much. Much imaginative imagery is only 9 syllables….but it speaks a particular truth.

    Lady Nyo

    Comment by ladynyo | December 1, 2011 | Reply

    • Thanks so much, Lady Nyo! I feel much honored, too, by your visit.

      Comment by alee9 | December 2, 2011 | Reply

  2. Lovely!

    Comment by sanjuktaa | December 2, 2011 | Reply

    • I’m glad you find it so! Thanks so much!

      Comment by alee9 | December 3, 2011 | Reply

  3. I agree. It reads very well vertically too. Being a lover of words and economy of words, the vertical structure places emphasis on each word yet drops meaning to the next with a final complete thought (or two) at the end. 🙂

    Comment by Yousei Hime | December 5, 2011 | Reply

    • What a wonderful critique and analysis of thought and structure in my haiku, Yousei! Yes, I’m getting to love the 5-in-5 short poetry form. It sort of forces me to summarize into the most economic sense a world of meaning in terms of mood, setting, times, object and image, a big thought. Thanks again!

      Comment by alee9 | December 5, 2011 | Reply


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