morning tide/seashore/high tide (my last post at NaHaiWriMo for now)
a.*
morning tide—
still
the heaving waves
b.
seashore–
washed off burdens
lapping at our feet
c.
billows and clouds
fading as dreams—
high tide
NaHaiWriMo prompt: seaside, seashore 07/16/2011
*the only one I posted on the site
I’m taking a breather from writing haiku on the NaHaiWriMo FB site to rethink on where I am and where I’m going with this genre. My writing a haiku has been taking me longer and longer, more tedious because the more I’m learning about what makes a good one, the more conscious I am of each word I put down. I feel that this process is taking a toll on the intuitive way I write poetry as most of the lines I write do seemingly write themselves out in one breath. Not so, with haiku that I want to work; yes, it comes easy when I’m ‘haiku-ing’ for myself or in this blog but when I begin to be conscious of ‘judging eyes’, I falter and fail and I write what for me and often I’m not wrong, a ‘lame’ or ‘yikes’ haiku.
I guess I should try to learn more, read more from Basho who lured me into the art in 2005 when I found a collection of his haiku, honestly the first I ever read having been schooled in continental literature, at the Enoch Pratt Library main library in Baltimore. Perhaps, I should reflect more on how his haiku often turn out as a meditation like in the famous ‘old pond’ where the frog’s splash fractures the silence to remind him that in the stillness of a pond, there is sound, there is life that brings him back from the ether to the frog.
But not wanting to lose my haiku-writing cells, I’m still writing with the prompts privately and continuing with my haibun memoir, some of which or excerpts of which I’ll post here once in a while.
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autumn wind
wondering about lilies
in a mountain pond
Tell me a writer who really gets a satisfying jornal, in Spanish a daily wage or its equivalent, and I’ll bare a spirit in constant bouts of doubtfulness. Does a writer earn more because of what he writes and how he does it? Or is a writer paid more or less because of who he is? Is it money or honor he expects to receive?
Ahhh … but money as wage, and praise or honor as reward would be too predictable, too common as Job lamented in the Book of Job. It is in these lines that read: “Is not man’s life on earth nothing more than pressed service, his times no better than hired drudgery? Like the slave, sighing for the shade, or the workman with no thought but his wages, months of delusion I have assigned to me, nothing for my own but nights of grief. Lying in bed I wonder, ‘When will it be day?’ Risen I think, ‘How slowly evening comes!’
Restlessly I fret till twilight falls. Swifter than a weaver’s shuttle my days have passed, and vanished, leaving no hope behind. Remember that my life is but a breath, and that my eyes will never again see joy.”
Not money but joy is the ultimate wage as the passage implies. And joy is not hard to earn for it is in everyday life if we have eyes to see, a nose to smell, fingers to touch, ears to hear–a heart beating. This to me, is how a writer earns a daily wage. His wages then take the guise of treasures his heart can transfigure into a universe of thought that taps into other hearts, that causes a swirl in the depth of other souls, or that makes wings to sprout on leaden heels.
Sometimes not joy but rueful, poignant moments are my pick. Take what I earned once: On my walk home in my neighborhood, I caught two clumps of snowdrops–such tiny blossoms smaller than fingertips that do not look up but shyly droop close to black patches on the ground winter has frozen. That afternoon in the frosty wind, they trembled as if ready to turn away and run but how could they? For that poignant moment on seeing the wintry rain beat on the fragile snowdrop–as if pushing it to go home now, go to sleep–I earned my jornal, my daily wage.
Once on summer walk, the crackle of dried leaves just hit me both like the laughter of children and sobs long suppressed. Neither one of them would resolve the dryness, but I recalled how each does bring tears: laughter for joy, sobs for healing that comes with the release of a dammed-up pain. My jornal that day came as two haiku.
Fall has since shortened the day and the heart begins to crave for lost space that it doesn’t even recall which or where. I feel that most treasures have turned into mush so much so I wouldn’t be able to sift them off the ground. Yet I caught the dying day yesterday–so glorious in the gold of autumn it opened a flip side of serene heaven. Blades of grass coated in diadems of rain that carpet the lawns render royal walks poor by imitation. A burst of red maple against an inky blue sky humbled me, a soul bragging about her skill to recreate beauty in words.
I suppose I’m taking Job’s reflections to heart. I’d rather not gloss over each day and look beyond what’s there, right before me, or else fragile as is my breath one day “my eyes may never again see joy” to write. With what then will I compare the eternal joy, the ultimate wage I await?
Yet for now, as other eyes hanker to make the invisible visible, I put a tag on some moments of joy. Like on seeing the snowdrops, I paid myself $200 as my jornal.
What could have been yours?
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I’m glad you’re still writing along with the prompts, hermana. But don’t bash your haiku. You have, for me, one of the most interesting and lyrical voices around. I feel, like you, that my haiku is “wanting.” I’m sure (I know) other people might share that opinion. Perhaps it’s just that the form comes less naturally for me . . . and, perhaps, for you as well . . . given your lyricism. But that’s what I find interesting–your use of language, and your ability to present metaphors in such a rich way. Take heart in what you do so well, and don’t let others influence your voice unnecessarily.
I can’t thank you enough for this, hermana! Thank you for your reassurances. I know, like you, that the form often feels like a square to my roundness but something in the discipline keeps me going; I’m sure you feel the same way. And you write beautifully, too! I love all your tanka–they flow so smoothly. Perhaps, I just need a break from what I had imposed on myself to do. Some kind of free space might do some good and I’ll be back!
Alegria,
Your taking a breather comments are superb. In my opinion you get at one of the serious roadblocks to writing good haiku. It is both extremely intuitive and overly rational. You need both.
But…. I also feel that one of your haiku “Strawberries cut in half” will be remembered for a long, long time. It just sparkles with light and darkness. I for one am a big fan of your haiku.
Sully
Thank you so much, Jim! One fan, that’s you, is a huge boost for me. I love that ‘strawberries’ haiku, too. It’s another haiku I wrote outside of the square, or intuitively, as you put it, for a fun prompt.
Perhaps, rationality does affect what I realize is the essence of the Japanese masters haiku–deceptively simple, yes, but getting into the heart of mysteries. Indeed, one must study the form and absorb it so much so that one becomes a part of you, hence, your haiku simply flows into the form but coming not from the mind in stead from deep within you where borders have melted. But here am I, rationalizing again! Thanks again for your wonderful comment!