for a moment of joy or moments no one pays for, i give myself a ‘jornal’. this makes me rich. try it.

…recalcitrant stars and what to me is this haiku moment?

soft rain at dusk
on white magnolias–
recalcitrant stars

What to me is this haiku moment? For me, soft rain at dusk transports thoughts into a magical dimension where reality merges with the unseen. The eye then blurs and in a blink opens to a patch of the universe often easily called poetic moment, one that frees the mind of fences or the masonry of reason. In this haiku, I slipped from the real–soft rain on white magnolias and invisible stars on a dense gray sky–to a confrontation with the galaxies. The stars as in all Nature exist as themselves outside of me but I with a universe within me siphon them with my emotions; in this haiku, I imagine them protesting to descend and touch, perhaps, even kiss the oh, so alluring open-faced magnolias. And not them but the rain is made to fall on infinitesimal lips they imprint as crystal beads in the petals. The haiku for me is a collision of beauty and our imperfect desires, which I projected to the stars. Hence, it must end with just that moment, that tension I feel between the stars grumbling over Nature’s laws, my own recalcitrance over my finiteness really.

Posted for One Shot Wednesday at the inimitable One Stop Poetry, a gathering place for poets and artists, winner of the 2011 Shorty Award for the Arts. Check us out.


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  1. I love this haiku because it makes me think of the raindrops as impermanent just as the illusion of stars, upon a flower that will only last so long.

    Comment by dustus | May 4, 2011 | Reply

    • I’m glad you love it, Adam! Thanks!

      Comment by alee9 | May 5, 2011 | Reply

  2. LOVE this…

    Comment by mel | May 4, 2011 | Reply

    • Thanks, Mel!

      Comment by alee9 | May 5, 2011 | Reply

  3. nice capture of the moment..and i enjoyed reading your explanation as much as the haiku….

    Comment by brian | May 4, 2011 | Reply

    • Thanks as always, Brian!

      Comment by alee9 | May 5, 2011 | Reply

  4. A soft-focus on reality in this haiku that yet has teeth, and your comment very illuminating, Alegria, in how you approach your work. Enjoyed both haiku and your exploration of the thoughts and feelings behind it.

    Comment by hedgewitch | May 4, 2011 | Reply

    • Thanks, Joy! I wasn’t sure, I’d be clear enough.

      Comment by alee9 | May 5, 2011 | Reply

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