jornales

for a moment of joy or moments no one pays for, i give myself a ‘jornal’. this makes me rich. try it.

romance in haiku (with prompted items from NaHaiWriMo wall)

#16
packing for one
except
our toothbrushes

#16b
morning waves
lapping on our toes—
in a wink sunset

#16c
the lake
ahhh—
a hand clasp

#16d
arrival gate
blur of a hundred faces
except yours

end of winter clouds–
their heartbeats the only sound
between them

spring–
between patches of night sky
a pregnant moon

Numbered items from NaHaiWriMo wall. Romance in haiku because of its compact, disciplined form reads more intense for me, more compelling from what’s unsaid. What do you think?

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March 17, 2011 - Posted by | haiku, poetry | , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , ,

4 Comments »

  1. I like these, Alegria. Number 16 is quite good, except our toothbrushes holds true. And 16b is priceless – in a wink sunset. That is how it is – a day, a month, years.

    Sully

    Comment by Sully | March 18, 2011 | Reply

    • …the ‘small things’ woven in a life together we hardly ever take notice until we think back. Amazing how romance lies in such things, isn’t it? Thanks, Sully!

      Comment by alee9 | March 18, 2011 | Reply

  2. I love the last three, especially, hermana. Your sense of romance–the telling and not telling–seems right on.

    Comment by Margaret Dornaus | March 18, 2011 | Reply

    • Mil gracias, mi hermana! Even in quite spare and disciplined haiku, I now realize, we can express romance! Lodged in the heart, isn’t it?

      Comment by alee9 | March 18, 2011 | Reply


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