jornales

for a moment of joy or moments no one pays for, i give myself a ‘jornal’. this makes me rich. try it.

enraged (for One Shoot Sunday)

Darth Vader by Jack AZ

we go on, wagging
forefingers at skies,
resenting seasons
that fall on us in clumps
of such rhythmic
regularity we just can’t
play our black violins
raging against or else

against the grind
we feel a heartless hand
its fingers like iron
claws so tight in grip we find
our waggling a senseless
attempt at being freed—if
but one beat one note

one breath that does not
fall in rhythmic rhyme
skids from fingers that slide
from point to point to
point, interminable
points, infinitesimal bits,
that had so imprisoned us
raging—

one breath that stops and
we can’t, we won’t find out
we haven’t moved away
from seasons we resented,
music we played, beats
we raged against

Posted for One Shoot Sunday at One Stop Poetry from a photo prompt titled, “Darth Vader” by Jack AZ. Join us, a community of poets and artists who share the art they so love and nurture reach other.

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February 20, 2011 - Posted by | free verse, poetry | , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , ,

16 Comments »

  1. hi alegria– this is gorgeous– just the ticket for the middle of the night here in snowy colorado– write on– your work is so very beautiful! xxxj

    Comment by jenneandrews | February 20, 2011 | Reply

    • Thanks, Jen! I’m glad to have given you a ‘ticket’ to ‘fly’ on midnight and in the snow. I love yur poems, too!

      Alegria

      Comment by alee9 | February 21, 2011 | Reply

  2. Powerful stuff. I didn’t exactly like it but I felt it which is better.

    Comment by Pen | February 20, 2011 | Reply

    • …at least I made you feel better! Thanks, Pen!

      Comment by alee9 | February 21, 2011 | Reply

  3. It took me a while to get my head around it, and understand where you are coming from..nice one

    Comment by Kodjo Deynoo | February 20, 2011 | Reply

    • You did get around it and you liked it! That’s worth the hard work I did on this prompt!

      Alegria

      Comment by alee9 | February 21, 2011 | Reply

  4. …fall on us in clumps
    of such rhythmic
    regularity… loved this and like where the “music” takes you..

    Comment by Claudia | February 20, 2011 | Reply

    • Thanks, Claudia! I love this line, too! And it fits the theme on music though in my mind because of the picture prompt quite ‘darky’. Thanks again. I do feel honored with your comments.

      Comment by alee9 | February 21, 2011 | Reply

  5. Music takes the dark side in this poem. Loved the laid low and rhytmic references Algeria. Wow you did much more than scratch the surface with this one

    Comment by RepressedSoul | February 20, 2011 | Reply

    • Thanks for the ‘wow’ Shanhendry!

      Comment by alee9 | February 21, 2011 | Reply

  6. Lively, kicking poem, great flow.

    Comment by Steve Isaak | February 20, 2011 | Reply

    • Thanks so much Steve! Coming from you, this feels good.

      Comment by alee9 | February 21, 2011 | Reply

  7. what a slideshow of emotions, like the notes sliding off the fretwork of the black violin–agree, this is far beyond the surface. Loved the idea of trying to get one breath free from the crushing hand, of anger or fear or inevitability….great poem.

    Comment by hedgewitch | February 20, 2011 | Reply

    • “…fretwork”! For me, coming from you such great critique has made me see through the haze, honestly, of what I’ve written! When I was writing this, it was if a hand not mine wrote it through me. Word for word, it flowed though I felt the emotions emotions strongly. No opaqueness in the mirror between you and me, it seems! Our spirits could not but be connected some time in ages past. Even our names mean the same! Thanks again!

      Comment by alee9 | February 21, 2011 | Reply

  8. Nice take, glimpses like a show of pictures, filtering time, filtering emotions…

    Comment by Reflections | February 20, 2011 | Reply

    • Thanks, Petrina! Thanks for how you describe my poem…’filtering’! I love that!

      Comment by alee9 | February 21, 2011 | Reply


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