jornales

for a moment of joy or moments no one pays for, i give myself a ‘jornal’. this makes me rich. try it.

the kiss (for One Shoot Sunday)

*composed from a picture prompt, a photo by Lisa Michelle Arhonditis, at One Stop Poetry blog’s One Shoot Sunday

among the willows we waited
for the wind to calm down—
the wind sometimes listens
to our whispers
and steals from ripples of the lake
our secret sighs

on our way back
a ruckus of the sparrows
in the lilac bush
sunk into the twilight—
we waited for the darkness
to open up for the moon

the night slipped in
more silken than cherry blossoms
more fragile than a wing tip
as innocent as a star–
then your kiss birthed a galaxy
swirling us to infinity

I posted this poem for One Shoot Sunday at the One Stop Poetry blog.

Join us – throw in your verses. Here are the rules (taken directly off their blog):

1. Write a poetic piece & post it on your blog
2. Then let us know about your post. Link back to One Shot
3. Sign up in the Mr Linky list, linking directly to your post, AFTER you’ve posted it.
4. Go visit others who have signed up! Offer support & encouragement. Share your love of words and insight respectfully. Please try to visit as many participating poets as you can. We all could use and appreciate kind feedback.

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December 5, 2010 - Posted by | lyric poetry, Uncategorized | , , , , , , , , , , , ,

14 Comments »

  1. Beautiful sense of the natural world in your lines, and of your lovers being one with it. “…we waited for the darkness
    to open up for the moon..” Love what you’ve done here.

    Comment by hedgewitch | December 5, 2010 | Reply

    • I’m overwhelmed! Coming from you whose poetry is stunning! Thanks again, Joy!

      Comment by alee9 | December 6, 2010 | Reply

  2. Enjoyed your creative spin on the prompt! You place the action of the photo within a universal scheme that expands the scope of the image so well. Cheers 🙂 Thanks for taking the challenge

    Comment by dustus | December 5, 2010 | Reply

    • I’ll treasure your one sentence critique in the second sentence, Adam! More of this and I will start believing I am indeed a poet! Thanks again.

      Comment by alee9 | December 6, 2010 | Reply

  3. I too like your connection to the natural world and how you spin it into the photo prompt and bring it to life.

    Nicely done.

    Comment by Louise | December 5, 2010 | Reply

    • Thanks, Louise! It was too tempting not to put the image in the context of a narrative. Am I relieved it worked out. Thanks again.

      Comment by alee9 | December 6, 2010 | Reply

  4. Very beautiful. I especially enjoyed the line about the more silken than cherry blossoms. Here’s mine http://thelunaticsdiary.blogspot.com/2010/12/dreams-are-never-eternal.html

    Comment by Shigune Matsui | December 5, 2010 | Reply

    • Thank you! But in romance, doesn’t every space feel sliken like the petals of cherry blossoms?

      Comment by alee9 | December 6, 2010 | Reply

  5. you create quite an atmosphere with your beautiful words..dreamily flowing..beautiful

    Comment by Claudia | December 5, 2010 | Reply

    • Feeling uplifted that you like the poem, Claudia–wonderful words coming from you because the lines of your poetry never fail to be superb! Thank you!

      Comment by alee9 | December 6, 2010 | Reply

  6. Love your connection to things natural, imagery flowing through your words, culminating in pleasure.

    Comment by Reflections | December 5, 2010 | Reply

    • Amazing what goes into an image and how a reader like you connects to it…valued words from you! Thank you so much!

      Comment by alee9 | December 6, 2010 | Reply

  7. vivid imagery — a beautiful take on the photo! I quite enjoyed this.

    Comment by Helena Malheur | December 5, 2010 | Reply

    • Thank you! The picture helped draw out images from banks of memories perhaps or some I caught from those of others. Thanks again for coming by.

      Comment by alee9 | December 6, 2010 | Reply


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