jornales

for a moment of joy or moments no one pays for, i give myself a ‘jornal’. this makes me rich. try it.

First snow (one shot Wednesday)

Hush,
heaven stealthily drops to earth in clouds that cease
breathing, wings folded on trees, prayers
poised for flight.

We walk tipped on toe-points
to taste to feel this heaven dropping,
melting, sizzling, burning through black grounds—
our iced-beings.

Hush,
heaven drops from ir-recognizable skies
on whorled grounds our rages disowned
muting prayers of those who sigh.

Hush,
though the heart has no ears.

I am posting this poem for One Shot Wednesday at the One Stop Poetry blog.
Join us – throw in your verses. Here are the rules (taken directly off their blog):
1. Write a poetic piece & post it on your blog
2. Then let us know about your post. Link back to One Shot
3. Sign up in the Mr Linky list, linking directly to your post, AFTER you’ve posted it.
4. Go visit others who have signed up! Offer support & encouragement. Share your love of words and insight respectfully. Please try to visit as many participating poets as you can. We all could use and appreciate kind feedback.

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November 24, 2010 - Posted by | poetry | , , , , , , , , , , , ,

12 Comments »

  1. I love the hush that contains the poem in a state of a whisper though heaven is dropping the reader is in a quiet state

    Nicely crafted for One Shot – thanks Alegria

    Moon Smiles

    Comment by moondustwriter | November 24, 2010 | Reply

    • That in the end it came out whole, nicely crafted, too, as you say it is! I must thank you and this wonderful space for poets to grow (I’m risking a cliche here) WINGS!

      Comment by alee9 | November 24, 2010 | Reply

  2. Season-true, sublime verse/flow/language.

    Comment by Steve Isaak | November 24, 2010 | Reply

    • Thank you, Steve. I’m humbled by “sublime verse” but take it with upraised hands!

      Comment by alee9 | November 25, 2010 | Reply

  3. (Eric covers his ear with both hands)
    LA-LA-LA-LA
    I CANNOT HEAR YOU
    LA-LA-LA-LA
    THERE IS NO SNOW
    LA-LA-LA-LA

    Nice One Shot, Alegria!

    Yours in denial,
    – Eric

    Comment by Eric | November 24, 2010 | Reply

    • Thanks, Eric! Really, does the heart have ears? (When in denial…)

      Comment by alee9 | November 25, 2010 | Reply

  4. Good write with a lot of clear images, “clouds that cease
    breathing, wings folded on trees, prayers
    poised for flight.” and some unique word choices that make this poem stand out. Enjoyed it a lot.

    Comment by hedgewitch | November 25, 2010 | Reply

    • Thanks you! I’m running out of words to express how grateful I feel for your kind generous words (ooops, a pun?) about my poem. “Some unique word choices…” that’s been said of my writing occasionally in classes I took in NY. Apparently, an ESL like me tends to brew your language in some other way that often it’s ir-recognizable or it strikes you as “unique”. And I’m or we’re not even aware of it.

      As I’ve been making quite a cause of this topic, and increasingly writing about it, language indeed can be learned with the mind. But as it sinks into one’s being–wherever these recesses are where language is nurtured–it takes on a form onto itself so much so that when expressed it’s no longer quiet what it was. Thank you so much again!

      Comment by alee9 | November 25, 2010 | Reply

  5. hush though your heart has no ears…that was wonderful…a great poem for osw…very descriptive…cheers pete

    Comment by pete marshall | November 25, 2010 | Reply

    • Thank you, Pete! Thank you!

      Comment by alee9 | November 25, 2010 | Reply

  6. Hush, though heart has no ears… I agree.. but it does have the sixth sense.. so it knows… I liked your words.. thanks for sharing..

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    Twitter: @VerseEveryDay
    Blog: http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com

    Comment by Shashi | November 28, 2010 | Reply

    • Thank you for liking my words, Shashi. Yes, a sixth sense but when the heart “does not want to listen”… no ears or sxith sense would do, right? Thanks again!

      Comment by alee9 | November 29, 2010 | Reply


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