jornales

for a moment of joy or moments no one pays for, i give myself a ‘jornal’. this makes me rich. try it.

canyon evening sequence (one shoot Sunday)

*inspired by a photograph of Trent Chau

rattling the air
the cawing of crows—
our flight hours more

sunset
breaches rain-swept horizon
where embers sizzle

clouds wash
the canyon fissures,
draining our fears

from dreams
shadows rise fracturing
evening fall

canyon evening—
wind tracks to follow
the shimmering light

I posted this poem for One Shoot Sunday at the One Stop Poetry blog.

Join us – throw in your verses. Here are the rules (taken directly off their blog):

1. Write a poetic piece & post it on your blog
2. Then let us know about your post. Link back to One Shot
3. Sign up in the Mr Linky list, linking directly to your post, AFTER you’ve posted it.
4. Go visit others who have signed up! Offer support & encouragement. Share your love of words and insight respectfully. Please try to visit as many participating poets as you can. We all could use and appreciate kind feedback.

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November 21, 2010 - Posted by | poetry, sequence | , , , , , , , , , , ,

14 Comments »

  1. Beautiful imagery connecting well with the photo. Nice

    Comment by Reflections | November 21, 2010 | Reply

    • Thank you!

      Comment by alee9 | November 21, 2010 | Reply

  2. Delightful imagery, a vivid evocation of the image. Can almost close my eyes and just settle into the visuals – nicely done.

    Comment by Chris G. | November 21, 2010 | Reply

    • Thank you for such uplifting two-sentence review of my sequence! For me, a life line…

      Comment by alee9 | November 21, 2010 | Reply

  3. You have a wonderful way with words. Like your style. Cheers

    Comment by dustus | November 21, 2010 | Reply

    • And you have said what words any striving poet hankers for. Thank you!

      Comment by alee9 | November 21, 2010 | Reply

  4. I appreciate the word plays you get out of so few lines. Nicely done.

    Comment by Maureen | November 21, 2010 | Reply

    • Thanks, Maureen! The truth is writing a haiku sequence has been quite a challenge for me. But that it sometimes works like now or how you think it does is worth it!

      Comment by alee9 | November 21, 2010 | Reply

  5. I like haiku. These are filled with so much in so few words.

    Comment by Gigi Ann | November 21, 2010 | Reply

    • I’m glad you like haiku! Thanks!

      Comment by alee9 | November 22, 2010 | Reply

  6. ‘cawing crows’
    feast of imagery ~ sunsets yield ~
    appeals the senses ~
    Loved it
    ~ Lib ~

    Comment by libithina | November 21, 2010 | Reply

  7. how are you I was luck to discover your website in wordpress
    your Topics is impressive
    I learn a lot in your blog really thanks very much
    btw the theme of you site is really splendid
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    Comment by bet365 | November 24, 2010 | Reply

  8. Nicely done
    I didnt get around to the prompt glad you did it justice
    smiles

    Comment by moondustwriter | November 24, 2010 | Reply

    • Thank you so much! Thank you for a hand I so need to clasp to smile.

      Comment by alee9 | November 24, 2010 | Reply


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