jornales

for a moment of joy or moments no one pays for, i give myself a ‘jornal’. this makes me rich. try it.

stones


stones
on the riverbed–if
they were but words

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November 14, 2010 - Posted by | haiku, poetry | , , , ,

2 Comments »

  1. The final line of this haiku seems, perhaps, too precious? I think the use of “but” sounds too literary?

    stones
    on the riverbed – words
    worn smooth

    Comment by upinvermont | November 23, 2010 | Reply

    • You’re right again in my tendency to be “literary”. And thanks for your rewrite of the last line!

      Comment by alee9 | November 23, 2010 | Reply


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