jornales

for a moment of joy or moments no one pays for, i give myself a ‘jornal’. this makes me rich. try it.

flotsam

flotsam–

digging in the sand

for nothing

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August 11, 2010 - Posted by | haiku, poetry | ,

2 Comments »

  1. This one didn’t affect me as much as the others. The haiku feels as though its missing something – the unexpected association; or there’s not enough given. Flotsam, in a sense, already suggests that you’ve been digging in the sand for nothing so the final line comes as no surprise?

    Comment by upinvermont | August 13, 2010 | Reply

    • You’re right again!

      What about this:

      digging our foothold
      in the sand–
      flotsam

      Comment by alee9 | August 14, 2010 | Reply


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